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Please critique my writing

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03-26-2008, 10:49 PM
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  Old  Please critique my writing

Well its not actually my writing but my brother's. Hes looking for some reassurance about his writing style/tone before he launches his website. I personally think its good and funny.

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03-27-2008, 12:54 AM
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Ha, i like it. Funny but greatly written.

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Tell your brother not to worry about his writing. He has a nice tone and I found to it to be quite engaging copy. The one thing I would say regarding the site is take the feedcount off for now. You don't really need it until you have at least 300 subscribers, otherwise it looks like your site is dead.

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The site hasn't been launched yet. I will be sure to let you all know when it is

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I am getting a dead link.

07-27-2008, 07:56 AM
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Ya me too! I wanted to read it. Oh well maybe its down for a reason

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09-16-2008, 11:22 AM
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I think it's a great achievement for your brother that he went to start writing for his website.Great news.please show me the site URL.

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I'm with the others. I definitely like what I see!

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The writing is fine, he has nothing to be worried about. I rather like his sarcastic tone.

The sentence that starts:
"If you are tired of hauling your ass..."

Is a little awkward, he might want to revisit it. Just the use of commas and things could be structured a little better.

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The great thing about a Blog is that the writing doesn't have to be proper English. It is OK to use slang. Although i do think that its a little strong of a paragraph, meaning that if someone finds it offensive in nature then your creditability will go down and your loose the interest of your reader. I may also mention if you plan on using Adsense or some other means of making the site profitable then you might want to tone it down a bit. Most advertisement have strict guidelines as to the content of you site.

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